Big idea______ Exploration can cause conflict and misunderstanding
_____________Cabot went to Newfoundland and thought it was Asia
__to_________ Cartier went to Canada, named it and did the fur trade
Small idea____ Columbus went to North America and thought it was Asia
Exploration's Conflict and Misunderstanding
Mya
______Exploration can cause conflict and misunderstanding. When an explorer arrived at a new region, they usually did something according to their habits, but the native people might be misunderstand them because of their different habits. Conflict was be caused by it. For instance, Cabot went to Newfoundland and thought it was Asia, Cartier went to Canada, named it and did the fur trade, Columbus went to North America and thought it was Asia.
______Cabot was an Italian explorer. He would like to go to Asia. However, he arrived at another region, Newfoundland. He found fishes, the sod. Cabot wanted to go to a region, but he went with the wrong way, and he didn't know he made a mistake. It's a big misunderstanding. Exploration means go to one place that people never known or gone. So, people would go in a way that to another place. When the explorer arrived, he would according to that region's environment to get the first impression of the region that he wanted to arrived. So, exploration can cause the misunderstanding.
______Cartier went to Canada, named it and did the fur trade. Although he got on well with the leader, but I am sure before it, the stranger and the native people are not friends. The reasons are Cartier is a stranger, their languages are different, and the most important one is the explorer's possessive heart. Exploration can cause conflict and misunderstanding.
______Columbus wanted to go to China because of money. He had never gone to China before, and he made mistake on his way. After he arrived there, he was not friendly at all. He started bullying people. He made them become servants and manpower. He occupied the land and money. Although he took lots of resources to his country, he brought many harm to the region. The native people were angry, and they against. Visibly, conflict was happened.
______Cabot went to Newfoundland and thought it was Asia, Cartier went to Canada, named it and did the fur trade, Columbus went to North America and thought it was Asia. People can see, exploration can cause misunderstanding and conflict. Everyone does not like stranger, especially the explorer often did some bad events. Exploration is a good thing , also is a bad thing.
______Exploration can cause conflict and misunderstanding. When an explorer arrived at a new region, they usually did something according to their habits, but the native people might be misunderstand them because of their different habits. Conflict was be caused by it. For instance, Cabot went to Newfoundland and thought it was Asia, Cartier went to Canada, named it and did the fur trade, Columbus went to North America and thought it was Asia.
______Cabot was an Italian explorer. He would like to go to Asia. However, he arrived at another region, Newfoundland. He found fishes, the sod. Cabot wanted to go to a region, but he went with the wrong way, and he didn't know he made a mistake. It's a big misunderstanding. Exploration means go to one place that people never known or gone. So, people would go in a way that to another place. When the explorer arrived, he would according to that region's environment to get the first impression of the region that he wanted to arrived. So, exploration can cause the misunderstanding.
______Cartier went to Canada, named it and did the fur trade. Although he got on well with the leader, but I am sure before it, the stranger and the native people are not friends. The reasons are Cartier is a stranger, their languages are different, and the most important one is the explorer's possessive heart. Exploration can cause conflict and misunderstanding.
______Columbus wanted to go to China because of money. He had never gone to China before, and he made mistake on his way. After he arrived there, he was not friendly at all. He started bullying people. He made them become servants and manpower. He occupied the land and money. Although he took lots of resources to his country, he brought many harm to the region. The native people were angry, and they against. Visibly, conflict was happened.
______Cabot went to Newfoundland and thought it was Asia, Cartier went to Canada, named it and did the fur trade, Columbus went to North America and thought it was Asia. People can see, exploration can cause misunderstanding and conflict. Everyone does not like stranger, especially the explorer often did some bad events. Exploration is a good thing , also is a bad thing.
Focus 2.5/4
回复删除You don't really mention how these examples connect to the topic of conflict and misunderstanding.
Content 2.5/4
Where is your topic sentences? Where are your concluding sentences? They don't seem to introduce your paragraph or conclude your paragraphs. Some of them do, but most of them don't.
Style 2.5/4
You need to use higher level vocabulary. Don't use thing remember!!!! Use your vocabulary!
Make it interesting to read. Don't sound like a formula. Show your opinion about the topic in a powerful way!
Usage 2.5/4
You have some mistakes. Please remember to check your essay after you blog.
1. Everyone do not like strangers
Organization 3/4
You have your body paragraphs. They are not really engaging. It is very formulaic and structure. Try to add Mya's voice into your writing. I see a thesis statement.
13/20 x2 = 26/40
Overall, you need to put more effort into your essay! I think you can do a better job. Right?
Is that your plan? It doesn't have enough detail.
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